PP&P fanfiction

[Emii]

I've started another Peter Pan and the Pirates fanfiction - if you wanna see and possibly tell me what you think, please go here:

www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1647037

Thankies!

[Drassil]

Yes, I got an 'author alert' about it and read it straightaway. Unfortunately, my experience of Peter Pan is based on Disney's cartoon and the film Hook, rather than on the book. But I really enjoyed your tale. I have lived in London all my life (on-and-off for my university years), and your portrayal of the town was fine - charming, even! Peter's naivety seems very natural and not too hackneyed - I like his musings about breaking his bones, and his thoughts of taking some London smog to Neverland with him!

I was a bit confused over Peter's crash landing, and would certainly read more to find out what happened and why. I'm also unsure about what had taken place at the start of the story: had Peter just returned Wendy to London from Neverland, but left her brothers over there? All very interesting... You will write more, won't you?

And is the line 'first star on the right and straight on until morning' from Peter Pan? I've heard it used out of context in a film.